A Newcomer

"Bye!" I called.

Smiles to Self! Pads Out into the forest Sniffs The air to see if there was any prey. Smells Rabbit Sees and crouches down. Pounces on it and kills it in one blow. Carries it Back to the pack!

OOF: Snow, I don't mean to critizize you, but I've held my tongue for as long as I can manage. Please, please, please stop RPing like that! I mean, try to RP like Roxy sometimes! Don't just do halting sentences like "Sees Another Wolf. Hides In Bushes." can you do something a little more descriptive like "As I padded around the clearing, waiting, I saw a wolf with a pelt of______ coming towards me. Panicking, I hid in the nearest thing: a thick bush." Please? It's driving me nuts.

Okay So Sorry! Its Just All RPs Are Diffrent I Really Only Talked like How I do Now. So Yeah... Sorry Again!

Pads in Carefully Trying Not to Intrude Any other of the Wolves. Feels Diffrent Around All These Wolves That I Have Never Met Before. I Slowly Walk to Sunfire Glancing over alot To Make Sure Nobodys Staring.

( Is That Better Kre?)

Kretari. Shut up, because this is how Silas RPed when he first came here. Would you lash out at him like that? Please, try to say something a bit.... calmer.

Snow, she means like this, using "I".

I walk up, hating to disturb other wolves. I wouldn't be happy if they got mad at me, so I stay quiet. But yes, I've noticed it's always in your fist sentence. The rest is PERFECT!


Kre... Oh gosh... I'm sorry.

OOF: Um....okay.....first off, Snow, it's okay, you don't need to apologize. And um, Rox? I wasn't lashing out. I just told her in a nice way to be a litte more...descriptive. Oh, and Snow, yes, it's better, thank you for being accomadating.

( Okay) Drops Rabbit at Paws " I Caught Some Prey For You Sunfire, Since You Are Letting Me Stay Here" I Say in a Whisper but Proudly.

Sunfire smiled at the Charcol-Colored wolf. "Thank you."

Smiles Brightly " Anytime!" Lays Down Alittle Out Of Den To Let Sun Warm Black Slick Fur.

Smiles! " I Would Be Honored To Stay In This Pack!" Dips Head Showing Respect. " Thank You So Much... For Everything. I Could Wish For Nothing More."

Gets Up And Pads Happily Around The Clearing

( Well My Bro Cant Make An Account For Blaze When I Joined I Left Something About Blaze. Is It Okay If Uses My Account To Act As Him?)

Hey Sun, I'm gonna RP ADen too.

Aden sat down in the clearing.

Sunfire smiled. "Welcome to the Pack."


OOC: SUre!

(Okay Thanks. Wait I Can Act As Bro)
"Thank You. Do You Need Me To Do Anything?"

"Im Going Back To My Den. Tell Me If You Need Anything!"

YEAH...

"OK, I'll tell you when dinner is." She said happily.

( Thanks! and one more question. people say OOF?)
"Okay" I Say Happily. I Sniff Around Longing to See My Brother.

OOF or OOC. Out Of Forum or Out Of Character

OOF: Thanks Kre!

OOF: no prob. I was confused about that when I started too.

OOF: I Was too i didnt know why You were doing that

OOF: lol, yeah.